1st - Entrant B
2nd - Entrant I
3rd - Entrant H
HM - Entrant J
Entrant A: Ah, beautiful, beautiful, beautiful. This entry is very emotional, very feeling... I applaud you on your good use of drifting thoughts. I thought this might have been better if it was written in first person, since it had that closeness to it already, but that's just an opinion.
Entrant B: Tense, dramatic, deft, and lyrical. I absolutely loved it. You have created a lovely story, not just a fragment, but a whole story within limitations. The pictures you paint of the modern world are done artfully, drawing from what we know of here and today and basing it on a world that is foreign and also familiar. Once again, I loved it.
Entrant C: Wooh, Neville! Very fine piece you have written... it stays very in-character and intense from beginning to the end. I especially loved how easily you fit in your character and wrote from his perspective of things... wonderful job!
Entrant D: Aww, so sweet! You wrote with true emotion and conviction... not just something from your head, but from your heart. I do appreciate that. Keep working on transitions between emotions for your main characters... they're very smooth already, but could be a bit smoother. And keep up the good work!
Entrant E:
You are amazing... what a brilliantly composed little piece. Terran is a perfect main character, strong, but with conflict. This has all the potential of a full-lengthed book... and yet is lovely in the small form it's in. Beautiful job!
Entrant F: Ah, lovely, lyrical little piece! One thought I had... it might have sounded better if the "voice" (the person speaking) had actually sounded like a slave. A slave wouldn't really know much about mustangs or dolphins, but they would know a lot about free, determined crows or witty trout that always elude capture. Think of how Sam Gamgee spoke... using stuff he knew.
Anyway, lovely job... I really liked it!
Entrant G: Ah ... you picked a tough subject to write on, but did very well, all things considered. You're dialogue sounds a little rough in a few places... but otherwise it's very emotional and moving. Keep at it, you have a very unique style that I love!
Entrant H: Stunning. Just stunning. I'm almost left wordless... you wrote very well, expertly well even, with Aragorn and Arwen. The piece is feeling, moving, and very, very touching. It's like a live glow... and a special comment on your amazing use of descriptive language. It served you well here.
Entrant I: Hmm, interesting. A very unique glimpse into the life of someone we hear nothing of... I really, really loved it. Wish it would have been longer, but still loved it. Very well organized, and perfect ending.
Entrant J: Oooh, excellent dialogue! The opening could have been a bit more dramatic or intense... but overall, wonderful job. The proposal scene made me literally smile... something scenes rarely do.
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"The piano is able to communicate the subtlest universal truths by means of wood, metal and vibrating air."
], but this made me cry! Amazing 
