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Author:  FRODOFAN [ May 4th, 2007, 4:50 pm ]
Post subject:  Iambic Metered Poetry (CLOSED. AWARDS POSTED.)

If you don't know what the title means, this probably isn't the contest for you.

Rhyming preferrered.


It must be in iambic meter.


One entry per person.


Your choice of subject.


Don't make it too long.


Good luck!


No more entries accepted after June 1 or after I get at least 10 entries. I will be the judge.

Author:  FRODOFAN [ May 8th, 2007, 5:50 pm ]
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Is there no one else as daring?

Author:  ~RinielAranel~ [ May 8th, 2007, 9:02 pm ]
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I learned about this in school, I believe. It's the style of a Shakespearian sonnet, right?

Author:  Nauriel Rochnur [ May 8th, 2007, 9:03 pm ]
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I'll join! I believe I can write a poem in Iambic meter.

Author:  ethelfleda [ May 8th, 2007, 10:43 pm ]
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i've written many a poem in iambic meter in the past (iambic tetrameter and rhyming couplets are my structural devices of choice) but i haven't written any poetry in a while. could i enter an old poem, or does it have to be specially written for this?

Author:  FRODOFAN [ May 8th, 2007, 11:28 pm ]
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~RinielAranel~ wrote:
I learned about this in school, I believe. It's the style of a Shakespearian sonnet, right?


A shakespearean sonnet is in imabic meter, yes. Iambic pentameter. All metered poems aren't sonnets though. ;)


ethelfleda, you can enter an old poem. No problem. :)

Author:  ethelfleda [ May 12th, 2007, 7:05 pm ]
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FRODOFAN wrote:
ethelfleda, you can enter an old poem. No problem. :)

cool, thanks. here's my entry then:

Trapped

Not trapped by bars or lock and key,
No prison cell or guards for me.
Instead I’m trapped inside my head
With only fear and me to dread.

This lonely world feels small and grey,
No hint of joy or sign of day;
No silver moon or stars on high –
Nothing there but cold, bleak sky.

I long to feel the joy I see
In everybody else but me,
But all I feel is loneliness,
Too tired to eat, too weak to dress.

I cannot seem to shake the fear
That this, my life, will end right here.
My demon self won’t let me go
And I can’t beat it, that I know.

The walls I raise I cannot see
And yet they seem so real to me.
They tower above my lonely soul
And leave me trapped in this black hole.

Author:  FRODOFAN [ May 12th, 2007, 7:28 pm ]
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Good. Good. :D Anyone else?

Author:  Johnny's Fan [ May 12th, 2007, 7:31 pm ]
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ethelfleda wrote:
FRODOFAN wrote:
ethelfleda, you can enter an old poem. No problem. :)

cool, thanks. here's my entry then:

Trapped

Not trapped by bars or lock and key,
No prison cell or guards for me.
Instead I’m trapped inside my head
With only fear and me to dread.

This lonely world feels small and grey,
No hint of joy or sign of day;
No silver moon or stars on high –
Nothing there but cold, bleak sky.

I long to feel the joy I see
In everybody else but me,
But all I feel is loneliness,
Too tired to eat, too weak to dress.

I cannot seem to shake the fear
That this, my life, will end right here.
My demon self won’t let me go
And I can’t beat it, that I know.

The walls I raise I cannot see
And yet they seem so real to me.
They tower above my lonely soul
And leave me trapped in this black hole.


I'm not entering but I have to say that sounds like a poem from the heart. I can relate to that poem a lot. You've put into words how I feel better than I could have done.

Author:  ethelfleda [ May 12th, 2007, 7:37 pm ]
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thankyou, elegost and johnny's fan. that means an awful lot.


come on, surely someone else wants to have a go.

Author:  Johnny's Fan [ May 12th, 2007, 7:41 pm ]
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Your welcome.

I'd have a go, but I don't think I've ever heard of an Iambic Metered poem.

Author:  [ May 13th, 2007, 4:06 am ]
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Beautiful poems... but quite sad both of them. I couldn't help commenting on them...
Ellie, is it named Untitled on purpose?
It's like it takes a turn when focus shifts onto the girl. I absolutely love the four opening lines. Afterwards it gets so sad. But the last four lines flow really well too. I would have loved if you elaborated on the middle part. I feel like hearing more about her life! :-)

ethelfleda, it's a very complete poem. The rhyming and rythm flow extremely well and the message is clear. I agree that it is very simple, but it makes it powerful, sort of raw, because it is very easy to relate to it. However... I miss the hope, just a sparkle in the end, but I know it would probably ruin the whole text...

I know I probably shouldn't comment on your entries before the voting starts. I can edit my post if you think it will influence on future entries and the final voting :-)


EDIT: Commented on Ellie's poem in the Fanfic forum

Author:  FRODOFAN [ May 16th, 2007, 5:16 pm ]
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No one has to worry about any comments influencing my judging. I'm very hard headed. ;)

Author:  EarielMaurwen [ May 18th, 2007, 1:10 am ]
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I think I'll enter, if that's all right...

Author:  FRODOFAN [ May 18th, 2007, 11:32 am ]
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I would love to see you enter!

Author:  EarielMaurwen [ May 19th, 2007, 1:55 am ]
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Goodie! :) Here's my entry... (It's a poem i wrote a while ago--it's from Sam's point of view, talking to Frodo.)

As Much as This

The Elves may sing in twilit lands,
"Our love for Earth is deep--
Beyond the depths of Ocean sands,
This in our hearts we keep:"

In learning all the things of lore,
The Wizards and the Wise,
May love their charges "past all lore
That locked in Arda lies:"

Tree-herders love their forests long--
Beyond the passing Age,
Entwining with the woodland song--
Immortal life's long wage:

And Angels give their Arda love
Far greater than the sky--
But me, I know so little of
The deep, the fair, the high:

I cannot say, "more long than years,"
For I've not lived an Age--
Nor, "past the lore of Elvenseers"--
I'm not wise like a sage...

I can't say, "deeper than the Sea"
Which I have never seen--
Nor wrought the Earth in heaven's lee,
Ere Sunlight and Moonsheen:

I cannot know the mighty lore
That Ea harbours furled--
I only know I love you more
Than aught else in the World.

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