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Post subject:  Posted: July 6th, 2006, 11:58 am |
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pip&leggyluvr wrote: I went back to read this again, & Jax, I say this is still ur best poem. This, & Answered Prayer.  I luv this one so much!!  I think it's so0o0o awesome!! Everytime I read it, I jsut think, Oh man, that's so perfect!! U write awesome poetry, Jax, but if u can ever top this one, u'll be a master!! lol I completely agree with everything said here!! Every once in a while I copy some of your poems into a spiral of mine so I can read them whenever I want, and this one and Answered Prayer are right in the very front where I can read them all of the time.
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Post subject: Posted: July 6th, 2006, 5:40 pm |
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lol. They're saved on my computer!!! I made a wallpaper of answered prayer & it was my wallpaper for a while.....& actually Drowning In My Tears is up on my bulletin board. _________________ 
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Post subject: Posted: July 6th, 2006, 11:00 pm |
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Yep- same with me. I have two on my bulletin board. Jax, you're just too good.
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Post subject: Posted: July 7th, 2006, 1:42 am |
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You've certainly gotten a lot of replies, and you deserved them; VERY well done. You did ask for constructive criticism, though, and the only thing I could think to suggest is a little better metering; I feel awful saying that, as the poem is beautiful and it often depends on the reader for metering, but some of the lines seemed just a beat off.
EXCELLENT job however.
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Post subject: Posted: July 9th, 2006, 10:18 pm |
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Aw, don't feel mean. I havent written much poetry, but i know that as a writer, I want criticism. It helps a lot. @ least, 4 me it does. _________________
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Post subject: Posted: July 10th, 2006, 2:05 pm |
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I feel the same way sometimes, Anna. But, Pip is right- constructive critisism is always good to better anyone's writing.
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Post subject: Posted: July 10th, 2006, 3:22 pm |
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lol... That's just kinda weird to be honest about writing down my poems and stuff. Don't get me wrong feel free but I'm just not used to it a guess.
And Anna please don't feel bad. I always welcome help in any way i can get it. And other points of view are always helpful. thanks for the advice.
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Post subject: Posted: July 11th, 2006, 11:15 am |
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lol. that's how good u r, Jax!! btw, i let my friend, the 1 who also writes, read ur Unseen Emotion poem & he luved it!! _________________
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Post subject: Posted: July 12th, 2006, 3:45 pm |
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Isn't he the one that is one AU forum? or not?
You should have him post some of his stuff.
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Post subject: Posted: July 12th, 2006, 3:50 pm |
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yes, except her forgot his password, being the smart person he is. lol so he's prob. going to have to make a new account. *rolls eyes* lol _________________
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Post subject: Posted: July 13th, 2006, 11:21 am |
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lol Can't he get a new account? Or find the e-mail that the password was in?
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Post subject: Posted: July 13th, 2006, 1:45 pm |
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he prob. deleted the email. lol he's not the smartest person in world. (don't tellhim i said that hehe) yea, i'm going 2 try to convince him to get a new account. 8) _________________
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Post subject: Posted: July 14th, 2006, 5:23 pm |
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lol well, if he ever gets on let me know. And Also get him to post some poetry if he will.
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Post subject: Posted: July 14th, 2006, 5:33 pm |
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I will. but all of his r like 7 pages long. his style's really diff. from urs, 2, but i think u'd like it. he's read a couple of urs & luvs 'em. 8) _________________
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Post subject: Posted: July 14th, 2006, 5:41 pm |
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wow that's long! lol
Thats good though. I like reading people who have different styls and opinins etc.. than my own that way sometimes I can learn something from them.
Tell him that since he got to read mine he needs to at least post some so I can read his. lol
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Post subject: Posted: July 14th, 2006, 6:00 pm |
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lol. he had 2 go, but next time I talk 2 him, I will lol
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