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Broken Rose, Broken Heart
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Author:  pip&leggyluvr [ September 1st, 2006, 5:04 pm ]
Post subject:  Broken Rose, Broken Heart

Here's a poem I wrote 4 a contest....(I had 2 put it on a banner.) the banner is @ the bottom....it's OK. ....but let me know wut u think of the poem, & the banner, 2, if u wanna comment on it. thanks guys!! :-D :bye2:


I stare at the rose
That lay in my hand.
It’s broken in two.
I just don’t understand.

I thought everything was perfect;
That you were the one for me.
But now our love lies in pieces,
Just like this rose that you see.

Tears stream down my face,
And I let the rose slowly fall.
I bend down, and burry my face,
And quietly begin to ball.

I cry all night long;
An uncontrollable, painful, cry.
I feel so horrible; so miserable.
I wish that I would die.

The words you screamed echo in my head:
It’s done! We’re over; we’re through!
And the words that back to you I pleaded:
Please, don’t go…..I love you.

But you left me standing there anyway,
A broken a rose in my hand.
You left me there, so confused;
So unable to understand.

So now my sadness turns to anger;
My love turns into hate.
I want to hurt you; I want revenge.
I want you to meet your fate.

That way you can never
Break another soul.
You can never make another go through what I did;
You can never break what’s whole.

And as all these thing rush through my head,
I realize that we’re really not together anymore.
And so I lay there still and cry and cry.
And the broken rose, lies still, on the floor.




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Author:  gollum13 [ September 2nd, 2006, 2:53 pm ]
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That was a really wonderful poem and your banner is good work, I love it! :-D

Author:  pip&leggyluvr [ September 2nd, 2006, 5:12 pm ]
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^thanks (it's a HUGE banner, isn't it? lol :-P)

Author:  Jax Nova [ September 4th, 2006, 11:43 am ]
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I agree, :-D A wonderfull poem and a very nice banner as well. :)

Author:  pip&leggyluvr [ September 4th, 2006, 1:26 pm ]
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thanks Jax :)

Author:  ~*ArwenEvenstar*~ [ September 4th, 2006, 4:22 pm ]
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I love it, Pip!! Very well done- so sad, but so pretty. And the banner is very nice too- you did a cool effect on it. :)

Author:  pip&leggyluvr [ September 5th, 2006, 9:12 pm ]
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thanks! :-D :bye2:

Author:  Eldarwen [ September 5th, 2006, 9:36 pm ]
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I like it Pip. Its deep and thoughtful...the banner is spiffey also. Amazing...

Author:  pip&leggyluvr [ September 5th, 2006, 9:39 pm ]
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thanks! spiffey.........i like that word! almost as fun as nifty!! lol :-D

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