I liked it actually.
I thought it was very captivating in a strane sort of way. Really has good imagry to it as well.
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| Author: | Bubble Black [ January 4th, 2007, 9:47 am ] |
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She shivers in the sun She trusts no one but everyone Her eyes are shut but she sees the same as us Her mind is free and that's enough She stays forever in her safe place Where she has no dark fears to chase She and her enemies are like fire and water When she starts, no one can stop her She's like a cloud in the sky It floats and never stops to say goodbye. It's nothing special, but I'd love to hear your opinions. |
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| Author: | Jax Nova [ January 4th, 2007, 3:51 pm ] |
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I liked it actually. I thought it was very captivating in a strane sort of way. Really has good imagry to it as well.
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| Author: | Lady Elenriel [ January 4th, 2007, 4:09 pm ] |
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You poem is great Bubble Black. It has a mysterious vibe to it. As Jax mentioned, the imagery is also very good. Keep it up! 
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