Hey nice poem, it's sad but I like it it is well written.
Nice rymign as well.
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| Author: | Drew's Destiny [ April 8th, 2007, 12:55 pm ] |
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This is a poem in a 3, 2, 4, 2 line form. It was written mainly about Draco Malfoy from Harry Potter. However there are some parts that remind me Alot of Faramir from Lord of the rings. It is rated PG for violence. I lay here and cry Think of how easy is it would be to die Because I listen to you lie Now here I am wainting for love For you to stop and put me above I guess that I am to blame That I bring you shame I'm the reason my picture doesn't have a frame I am the reason your hatred came But all I want is to be your number one To be your loved son Hate all around The rutheless whipsering sound I'm just waiting to be found I want all to see the real me I need you to see what I can be Why can't you call me son When I come do you have to want to run When I do something right do you have to give me a look of stun Why can't we just have some fun Because all I want is to be your number one To be your loved son I have to bring us fame I have to honour our family name Yeah, it's always the same I want to be free to show what I feel To let everyone know what is real Can you see yourself in my eyes Can you see all the lies Do my unseen stained cheeks let you know of all my cries Can you tell that this is just my demise All I want to be is your number one To be your loved son I would give it all I am forever at your beconning call Even if I do seem to stall I cause my own tears I cause my own fears I let you cloud my my mind I let you put my heart to grind I follow the wishes of our own kind I take the oaths that bind Because all I want is to be your number one To be your loved son |
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| Author: | Jax Nova [ April 8th, 2007, 1:05 pm ] |
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Hey nice poem, it's sad but I like it it is well written. Nice rymign as well.
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| Author: | Drew's Destiny [ April 9th, 2007, 6:01 pm ] |
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Jax Nova, Thank you very much for reading and the nice comments. I have read some of your poems and you are a wonderful poet. So your compliments really mean alot to me. Anyway thanks again. |
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| Author: | Risestel [ April 14th, 2007, 5:00 pm ] |
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That is so sad, but it flows nicely. I like it. |
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| Author: | Drew's Destiny [ April 14th, 2007, 7:54 pm ] |
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Risestel, Oh, thank you. I am glad that you like it.  Oh, and I don't think that we have met so...nice to meet you. (shakes Risestel's hand)
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