*claps*
I like that a lot. It is really well done. iI especially like
"This is the life she wrote for her self,
a book of lost memories right off the shelf."
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| Author: | Johnny's Fan [ May 12th, 2007, 7:04 pm ] |
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*claps* I like that a lot. It is really well done. iI especially like "This is the life she wrote for her self, a book of lost memories right off the shelf."
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| Author: | ethelfleda [ May 12th, 2007, 7:14 pm ] |
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i saw this when i posted in FRODOFAN's competition thread and i think it's great. i like how you make the rhyme sound so natural and i love the enigma of it. |
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| Author: | Eä [ May 13th, 2007, 4:16 am ] |
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Ellie, I commented in the contest section, but it's probaly more appropriate to talk about the poem here, so I'm going to elaborate a bit here. Is it named Untitled on purpose? When I read it a word like Anonymous came into my mind... I absolutely love the four opening lines. It's like it takes a turn when focus shifts onto the girl. Then it gets so sad. But the last four lines flow really well too. I would have loved if you elaborated on the middle part. I feel like hearing more about her life! You have a great feel for words.. and yeah, it sounds so insignificant, but I find it really important in poetry, so it's meant to be a huge compliment 
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| Author: | Dark, Queen of Angmar [ May 14th, 2007, 7:16 pm ] |
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*dies, revives self and steal's writing ability* omg that was amazing, i have no words, seriousely... fabulous.... *dies again* *wanders off in amazement* |
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