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Author:  Tsukiko [ September 23rd, 2007, 4:16 pm ]
Post subject:  Azure (NR)
A poem I wrote about the azure sky.

Thanks to anyone who reads it. :D

Azure
An azure sky,
Pouring down on my eyes.

A calm, deep blue,
Filling my room.

Motionless wavering,
Stopping my quivering.

Stretching for miles,
Making me smile.

Seen barely,
But I'm still seeing.

A wind's blow,
Unclouding my mind.

Making perfect view,
I can now easily move.

An azure blue sky,
Making me cry with joy.
Author:  FRODOFAN [ September 25th, 2007, 1:10 pm ]
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Nice. I read a lot of poetry though, and I find the word "azure" is slightly overused. I wonder if you could find a more creative way to describe the shade of the sky?

Just a thought.
Author:  Tsukiko [ September 25th, 2007, 7:29 pm ]
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Hm..maybe! But, I love the word Azure alot. :p I dont think I could change it.

Oh dont think I didnt like your suggestion!! It was very helpful. I kinda agree. but like I said above...Azure..
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