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| Author: | Witch_King_of_Angmar [ February 7th, 2008, 11:14 pm ] |
| Post subject: | I'm Sorry |
I'm sorry, I'm sorry, I'm sorry forever. I'm sorry I forgot The first thing we shared. I'm sorry I destroyed What we once had. It's all my fault, Please blame me! You don't have To come back, Just hear what I say. I'm sorry I asked Something I shouldn't have asked. I'm sorry I thought You'd understand my words. I'm even sorry Our ways had to cross. The one thing I ask now, The one last thing... Is for you to forgive me, To know that I'm sorry. |
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| Author: | FRODOFAN [ February 15th, 2008, 12:55 pm ] |
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To me, this doesn't quite seem like a poem - just a letter of apology or something along those lines. It doesn't have any extra flourish that really makes it poetic. I'd like to see some metaphors or similies or some rhyme to really boost it up a notch. The sentiment is there though. It's a nice sentiment too. |
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