Verry interesting subject, leaves a lot to imagination which I like.
Showes very good emotion as well.
Nice job Arwen. *thumbs up*
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| Author: | ~*ArwenEvenstar*~ [ October 12th, 2008, 12:50 am ] |
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Something I wrote recently... please, please, please read and review!! The hard earth beneath is frozen and rough My somber mood is the grey sky above A misunderstanding, words not enough All that might have been, unrequited love To think of the things we will never do Fear to bequeath my secrets, fear to trust Words unspoken, things not said, all to rue Give your heart to her, and mine left to rust The heavens open to a cold, steel rain Each raindrop a tear for chances not made My soul wrenched open, yet purging the pain You hurt my pride, yet the anguish will fade The water penetrates skin, healing me The bliss of just this moment to be free |
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| Author: | Jax Nova [ October 12th, 2008, 10:23 am ] |
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Verry interesting subject, leaves a lot to imagination which I like.
Showes very good emotion as well.
Nice job Arwen. *thumbs up* |
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| Author: | ~*ArwenEvenstar*~ [ October 12th, 2008, 11:29 am ] |
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Thanks, Jax!! I appreciate it.
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| Author: | Daisy-lass [ October 27th, 2008, 6:47 am ] |
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Ooh very good! It's got that gut-wrenching feeling of "what-if"  Well done!
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| Author: | ~*ArwenEvenstar*~ [ October 27th, 2008, 8:04 am ] |
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Thanks so much!! I appreciate it.
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| Author: | Jasper Erenwei [ October 27th, 2008, 12:11 pm ] |
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Very Good! I like that there is room for the imagination. It gives you a feeling of dread and wonderment. Luff it! Jasper |
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| Author: | ~*ArwenEvenstar*~ [ October 27th, 2008, 6:35 pm ] |
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Thanks so much.
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| Author: | Jasper Erenwei [ December 7th, 2009, 9:58 pm ] |
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I come back to this post after over a year, and as I re-read it, it strikes me as amazing. I now write much more poetry than ever before, and have experienced a painful dose of life since I last logged on. This poem speaks to me so much more now. Thanks for writing it. And sharing it. Jasper |
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| Author: | ~*ArwenEvenstar*~ [ December 9th, 2009, 7:04 pm ] |
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Of course, that's so wonderful to hear. Thank you so much, I'm glad other people can relate and take meaning from it.
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