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Post subject: A Purging Rain  Posted: October 12th, 2008, 12:50 am |
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Joined: 30 December 2005
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Something I wrote recently... please, please, please read and review!!
The hard earth beneath is frozen and rough
My somber mood is the grey sky above
A misunderstanding, words not enough
All that might have been, unrequited love
To think of the things we will never do
Fear to bequeath my secrets, fear to trust
Words unspoken, things not said, all to rue
Give your heart to her, and mine left to rust
The heavens open to a cold, steel rain
Each raindrop a tear for chances not made
My soul wrenched open, yet purging the pain
You hurt my pride, yet the anguish will fade
The water penetrates skin, healing me
The bliss of just this moment to be free
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Post subject: Posted: October 12th, 2008, 10:23 am |
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Joined: 04 November 2005
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Location: In a pudle on Naboo with dragon kind and ents and Jedi and wolves living in the Last Homely House!
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Verry interesting subject, leaves a lot to imagination which I like. 
Showes very good emotion as well.
Nice job Arwen. *thumbs up*
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Post subject: Posted: October 12th, 2008, 11:29 am |
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Thanks, Jax!! I appreciate it.
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Post subject: Posted: October 27th, 2008, 6:47 am |
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Ooh very good! It's got that gut-wrenching feeling of "what-if"  Well done! _________________ <center>^#?:;
:. Not all that wanders is lost .:
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Post subject: Posted: October 27th, 2008, 8:04 am |
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Thanks so much!! I appreciate it.
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Post subject: Posted: October 27th, 2008, 12:11 pm |
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Joined: 21 September 2008
Posts: 156
Location: Wandering, lost in my secret realm of fiction & fantasy (who stole my map??)
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Very Good! I like that there is room for the imagination. It gives you a feeling of dread and wonderment. Luff it!
Jasper
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Last edited by Jasper Erenwei on December 7th, 2009, 9:59 pm, edited 2 times in total.
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Post subject: Posted: October 27th, 2008, 6:35 pm |
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Thanks so much.
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Post subject: Posted: December 7th, 2009, 9:58 pm |
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Joined: 21 September 2008
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Location: Wandering, lost in my secret realm of fiction & fantasy (who stole my map??)
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I come back to this post after over a year, and as I re-read it, it strikes me as amazing. I now write much more poetry than ever before, and have experienced a painful dose of life since I last logged on. This poem speaks to me so much more now. Thanks for writing it. And sharing it.
Jasper
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Post subject: Posted: December 9th, 2009, 7:04 pm |
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Of course, that's so wonderful to hear. Thank you so much, I'm glad other people can relate and take meaning from it.
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