that was beautiful ... i adore it
your excellent at words 
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| Author: | Telturwen [ April 8th, 2006, 6:27 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Fate's Beginnings - Poetry |
Fate’s Beginnings In the forests of the elven realm There walked a mortal man His mind was poised on pleasant thoughts And glimpses of a distant land A graceful scent, its sweet array, Began to close him in When he knew not where he walked His feet followed the wind As he began to sing a song Softly to the trees His voice was carried throughout And mind was left at ease An elven maiden passed him by Who seemed to him a dream "Tinúviel, Tinúviel!" he cried She smiled, turning back to him Dark hair swayed in the breeze With eyes like silver gems Her beauty she possessed freely And her trailing dress of elven hem The smile that lit her fair face Greeted this mortal man The divinity she once grasped Soon left to take his hand I'm just trying to get feedback, because I really have no one to ask about my poetry. Thanks! |
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| Author: | Aredhel Ar-Feiniel [ April 8th, 2006, 6:43 pm ] |
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that was beautiful ... i adore it your excellent at words
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| Author: | Lady_Legolas [ April 9th, 2006, 12:51 am ] |
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Ohhh that was beautiful! i love your rhyming, it all flows really well! Lady Legolas 
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| Author: | Telturwen [ April 9th, 2006, 6:02 pm ] |
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Thank you both so much! I'm glad you liked it. 
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