Fate’s Beginnings

In the forests of the elven realm
There walked a mortal man
His mind was poised on pleasant thoughts
And glimpses of a distant land

A graceful scent, its sweet array,
Began to close him in
When he knew not where he walked
His feet followed the wind

As he began to sing a song
Softly to the trees
His voice was carried throughout
And mind was left at ease

An elven maiden passed him by
Who seemed to him a dream
"Tinúviel, Tinúviel!" he cried
She smiled, turning back to him

Dark hair swayed in the breeze
With eyes like silver gems
Her beauty she possessed freely
And her trailing dress of elven hem

The smile that lit her fair face
Greeted this mortal man
The divinity she once grasped
Soon left to take his hand


I'm just trying to get feedback, because I really have no one to ask about my poetry. Thanks!

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The smile that lit her fair face greeted this mortal man. The divinity she once grasped soon left to take his hand.

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Ohhh that was beautiful!
i love your rhyming, it all flows really well!

Lady Legolas

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DevotingAndBetraying@groups.msn.com

Thank you both so much! I'm glad you liked it.

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The smile that lit her fair face greeted this mortal man. The divinity she once grasped soon left to take his hand.