IT's a good poem yes.
But as far as the rest of it I honestly can't say.... (first not sure how old you are and would have to know the situation etc...)
But I would just say ask somone you look up to who would know about the subject. *shrugs*
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| Author: | Guest [ April 11th, 2006, 10:37 am ] |
| Post subject: | If I asked you - a love poem |
If I asked you If I asked you would you be my family? Would you hold me when I cried, would you stay until I died? Would you stay with me forever, and always be around? Would you do your best to never let me down? If you asked me, I would be your family. I wrote this poem to my boyfriend. I'd like to get comments on whether it is any good. It's a very honest poem, and I suppose some will consider me too young for writing it (15 years), but it's what I felt when I wrote it. And what I still feel. |
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| Author: | Eyalan [ April 11th, 2006, 11:17 am ] |
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Ahhh, that is so sweet! And if that is how you feel, it's great you're being so honest! I'm sure he'll appreciate it! |
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| Author: | Jax Nova [ April 11th, 2006, 5:21 pm ] |
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IT's a good poem yes. But as far as the rest of it I honestly can't say.... (first not sure how old you are and would have to know the situation etc...)
But I would just say ask somone you look up to who would know about the subject. *shrugs* |
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| Author: | Guest [ April 12th, 2006, 10:21 am ] |
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he has already seen it. and he loved it... my friend who is 17 got to read it and she said it was good. *shrugs* i dunno. thanks anyway. ~*edit*~ It'd still be great with some resonse... If you people care to give some, of course...
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