If I asked you If I asked you
would you be my family?
Would you hold me when I cried,
would you stay until I died?
Would you stay with me forever,
and always be around?
Would you do your best
to never let me down?
If you asked me,
I would be your family.
I wrote this poem to my boyfriend. I'd like to get comments on whether it is any good. It's a very honest poem, and I suppose some will consider me too young for writing it (15 years), but it's what I felt when I wrote it. And what I still feel.
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IT's a good poem yes. But as far as the rest of it I honestly can't say.... (first not sure how old you are and would have to know the situation etc...)
But I would just say ask somone you look up to who would know about the subject. *shrugs*
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