I got shivers as well!! I really like it.
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| Author: | Caunion cyn Britannia [ July 6th, 2006, 10:04 am ] |
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This is a poem I thought of just overnight. Only looked at it briefly for mistakes so it may not be perfect but here it goes: In Love Heart pounding fiercely in chest Echoing in the far distance Blood rushing through body Like a thick red surging current And as lights flicker on and off Nerves wane and wax like the moon Courage comes and goes as all Around spin and whirl in space Eyes glued onto the ground Unable to rise, until at last With the effort of lifting the world Eyes soars to witness the sight Her body perfect and elegant Yet so fragile like a statue of glass Her tender skin glistening in light That radiates and shines from her Every movement of her are as Graceful as those of a dancer Roses and blossoms fall in grace As her lovely fragence fills the air Her eyes, pure as pearls and Clear as water, sparkle like stars Rosy lips curl, forming a smile Of not joy but simple pleasure The very sight of her beauty Stirs the coals of amour That has since laid in my heart, dormant for years My heart erupts into an inferno A burst of fiery passion and love Sheer bliss rushed through body Igniting my senses with pleasure As I steadily approach her My steps announce my desire My heart leaps about in joy Invigorated by the radiating love Her beauty draws closer My hunger becomes a surge Surge of lust overwhelming Me, drowning out all else Her body is ever so near Hearts beating so much faster Her hot breath fueling my desire Sending my mind into eternal bliss First fingers entwin then hands Her warm flesh exciting my senses Her crimson lips mingle wtih mine And together we stood in locked embrace |
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| Author: | Calathiel [ July 6th, 2006, 3:41 pm ] |
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Wow! That one is really good, I got the shivers when I read it! |
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| Author: | ~*ArwenEvenstar*~ [ July 6th, 2006, 4:05 pm ] |
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I got shivers as well!! I really like it.
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| Author: | Ashwise [ July 13th, 2006, 2:23 pm ] |
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Bravo! |
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| Author: | Anna Telcontar [ July 14th, 2006, 12:15 am ] |
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Wonderful! I don't know what it is, but I think there's a rhythm and a beat to it that is really good. It's kind of mezmerising. lol, I'm weird; I know. |
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| Author: | Eldarwen [ July 14th, 2006, 12:30 pm ] |
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Its beuatiful Frost. Very deep...I like it. |
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| Author: | Tari [ July 15th, 2006, 4:19 pm ] |
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Wonderfully done!!! |
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| Author: | BlackRose_Valentine [ July 16th, 2006, 5:29 am ] |
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That is amazing! |
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| Author: | Dunadariel [ July 16th, 2006, 2:47 pm ] |
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Very cool! I like the part where you say "Like a statue of glass" you get such a clear picture of what you're describing there. |
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