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 Post subject: The Evenstar Wanes: Part One
PostPosted: June 21st, 2006, 3:58 pm 
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For those of you that have read my first story, this will not be confusing. For those who haven't go read it here: http://www.arwen-undomiel.com/forum/viewtopic.php?t=8661

This story continues where "The Passing of the King" left off. Please comment. Also, this is only part one, more to come if anyone wants.

The Evenstar Wanes

The last light of day was passively sinking over the horizon, and shadows enveloped all but the tallest towers of Minas Tirith. In the palace of the King, on the highest balcony, stood a lone figure. A woman, there was no doubt. Clothed all in black, she moved not but for the black veil that danced in the wind. The light material stuck to the wetness upon her pale cheeks, and her eyes gazed unseeing upon the distant sunset.

Not far away stood the Lady Riniel, wife of Eldarion son of Aragorn, and Queen of Gondor and Arnor. Silently she watched, as she had done many nights before. A woman of noble birth and royal marriage, she hesitated before no one. Yet tonight was different. This lady was different.

Mustering her courage, Riniel walked slowly across the stone floor, stopping just behind the black figure. She spoke softly, “My lady?”

For a moment there was no response. Then, she turned. In body she was Arwen Undomiel, daughter of Elrond Half-Elven, wife of the late King Aragorn. Yet the light that was once captured in her gray eyes lived there no longer. Her face was ashen, and her lips held no smile. The look she gave Riniel broke her heart, for the young woman remembered brighter days. Days of laughter and festivals and singing…Arwen seemed to be waiting for something. Riniel returned to reality, remembering her purpose.

“Lady Arwen, your son wishes to speak with you.”

“Is that all, my dear? What is on your mind?” The Elven lady was not easily fooled.

Riniel hesitated, then said, “I admit, I fear for you. The King Aragorn has passed many months ago, and still you do not eat or spend time with those who love you.” Arwen took her eyes off of Riniel’s face, glancing up at the glittering stars. Undaunted, Riniel continued, “I do not wish to belittle your pain or grief, but has the time of mourning not ended? Must you rob your children of their mother as well as their father?”

Arwen looked at the young queen once again, her eyes full of tears. Her voice was a whisper, “Do not ever think such of me, dear one. You are young, and life holds such promise for you still. What joy is their in my life? What hope can I cling to? No, there is no place for me here.”

Riniel held her mother-in-law’s hand tenderly, her eyes pleading, “Oh, but there is. Your sons and daughters love you. They need you, more than anything right now. Please...”

“I will go to Eldarion, but I cannot promise more. In time, you will understand.” Arwen kissed the girl lightly on the cheek and departed. Riniel was left to wonder at her words.

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Wow! I love it Luthien of Lorien. I love the imagery and overall writing of the piece. I would love to read more of your stories. Great job! :)

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Wow I just read it (I know, a bit late..) and I love it. Great job indeed, I'd love to read more of your stories as well

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:D I am glad you both liked it! Part two should be up fairly soon.

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PostPosted: June 30th, 2006, 2:17 pm 


Hey Luth I found you! That was really good, you are a great writer. Is it based on the appendix of RotK?


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You found me? *is confuzzled* Anyways, thanks for the compliment, remind me to show you my story when you come over on Monday. And yes, this one is based right out of the RotK appendix, the story of Aragorn and Arwen.

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Again I can only say: WOW!!!
Your second story is as wonderful as the first. You write in a way that the reader can really imagine how each character feels.
I'm looking forward to read part two of your story.

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:jawdrop: WOW Luthien! :) That was amazing! :) :) It was so sad, and I feel so bad for Arwen! :( I can't wait to hear more! :)

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