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PostPosted: October 25th, 2007, 11:47 am 


You would happen to have been inspired by the current time of year would you :P

:nod: Very good! And you made it rhyme without it become unnatural. Something that happens often and annoys me no end (because poems don't have to rhyme :P)

I can't help comparing it with my style; because it isn't like mine in style, but it seems very similar in inspiration and intention.

basically, I like it, I just tried to give more than that, because I know how someone saying they like it isn't particularly useful :P Good work, sir!


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 Post subject: Cultural flare....
PostPosted: November 14th, 2007, 2:08 am 
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You poem is kind of cool because it has a great cultural flare to it. It is not quite like it would be written by someone living where I live in the NW USA.

I knew you were from England just by reading it. I think it is neat what inspiration can come up with in just a few minutes sometimes.

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PostPosted: December 7th, 2007, 11:45 pm 
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Not bad. The first line is a bit awkward phrasing-wise, but it's alright. You keep a pretty good rhythm. "Falls" and "withdraws" was a bit of a stretch for me though. I like the subject matter.

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It's one of those poems that sounds like you just could have spoken it, it seems very natural :) I can imagine it being told to little kids, because when I read it, it seemed kind of like something I might have heard when I was little.

I don't know if that makes an awful lot of sense, but basically, I really like it :D

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