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Post subject: Silver Snowflake..  Posted: February 16th, 2006, 5:12 pm |
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Joined: 20 January 2006
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Location: Hertfordshire, England
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( Making this up on the spot...so...do forgive me. ^_^; )
Frozen cerulean, such a vibrant embrace
of colour to harsh drained white.
Gentle words halted, stolen away
As the blizzard encases the echo.
Ah, how beautiful you are,
Against ice, your eyelashes frosted
by a kiss of an angel.
With nought but the touch of an artist,
You lie, so perfect forever.
Forgive me, my love, forgive me
as crimson stains in streaks.
Sleep my love, and never wake.
Sleep, my silver snowflake.
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Post subject: Posted: February 16th, 2006, 11:31 pm |
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I like it...Not that I'm a qualified critic of course, but it captures the emotion, and you use some powerful language.
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Post subject: Posted: February 16th, 2006, 11:32 pm |
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Location: Texas
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wonderful, it's very vivid
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Post subject: Posted: February 17th, 2006, 5:37 am |
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Location: Hertfordshire, England
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Thank you, to both of you.
I really appreciate the comments, and I do so love writing poetry.
I feel on a poem roll at the moment actually, so more will likely appear. -smiles-
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Post subject: Posted: February 17th, 2006, 4:09 pm |
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Joined: 04 November 2005
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Agree Enyalië_Vandarya... I am not a qualified critic by any means but I do like it. 
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Post subject: Posted: February 17th, 2006, 7:46 pm |
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Joined: 28 January 2006
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Location: England
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Ah, darling, its simply swoonable^^ *huggles*
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Post subject: Posted: February 23rd, 2006, 12:54 pm |
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Location: Hertfordshire, England
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^ Thank you again.
-smiles-
Swoonable, hm?
It's slightly ..sadistic. Although, I meant it to sound as such...does it sound evil?
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Post subject: Posted: February 23rd, 2006, 8:13 pm |
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It is definately very descriptive. Good job!
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Post subject: Posted: February 28th, 2006, 8:29 am |
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Location: England
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Very evil, darling. *grins* I believe that's where the swoonability comes in... *shifty eyes* I think it's the thought that evil must have a hidden side that makes it so. But yes, very sadistic and evil. ^__^
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Post subject: Posted: March 1st, 2006, 3:29 am |
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Location: California
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Love the lanugage. Very sharp and vibrant.
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Post subject: Posted: March 1st, 2006, 11:50 am |
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Thats beautiful! What else can I say?
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