I'll some of my work with you guys, I'm open for suggestions and such and you'll help me more by giving comment than saying bravo

Remember

Remember when you swore
you'd always be mine
Remember when you swore
you'd never make me cry

Remember the day
when you broke my heart
Remember the day
I thought I would die

Remember when you swore
you'd always stay by my side
Remember the day
when my soul should fly

PS: I have much more poetry, but I'll give you guys the change to give comments to this one first

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i love it! you should post more! i really like it!

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<center>“Envy consists in seeing things never in themselves, but only in their relations. If you desire glory, you may envy Napoleon, but Napoleon envied Caesar, Caesar envied Alexander, and Alexander, I daresay, envied Hercules, who never existed.”
at one point, I was alejandrah.

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*agrees* a very good poem

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I love it! it has a nice air of nostalgia about it. I like the repetition

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YAY! thanks guys ^^

here's another one (it's about Link in The Legend of Zelda: Ocarina of Time):

Hero of Time

Time passes by,
I am asleep
while many people die

Peace is gone,
when I wake up
Work is far from done

everywhere death seems to be
I will have to save this world
Is this not all because of me?

I opened the door
to the golden relic
then the beast let out his roar

When I wake up after seven years,
I am a hero with sword and shield
who faces more than thousands of tears

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Aww soo beautiful. Very good in my opinion. Very touching..

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Thank you I guess it can be a little hard to understand for people who don't know who Link is, I'm glad you like it

Here's another one, sadly enough about me
(long story about rejection and though I didn't really cry it did hurt)

The one I fell in love with

While I'm lying here on my bed
so much tears are shed
my love will never go away
if only you would stay

I sit here just behind you
I swear to you my feelings are true
but you are afraid of me
you remain how you used to be

The one I fell in love with...

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since no one is posting here anymore (snivel ) but I still wanna share more of my work with you guys I'll just add the next poem...

Books of Doom

Locked up in my room
with my books of doom

the sun is calling me
it's outside where I wanna be

but I can hear the teacher say
did you have another bad day?

Damn those tests
I hate them like pests!

Locked up in my room
with books that'll be my doom

- As you might have guessed, I wrote this in a test week and I didn't feel like studying at all! ^^

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