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PostPosted: July 6th, 2006, 10:04 am 
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This is a poem I thought of just overnight. Only looked at it briefly for mistakes so it may not be perfect but here it goes:

In Love
Heart pounding fiercely in chest
Echoing in the far distance
Blood rushing through body
Like a thick red surging current

And as lights flicker on and off
Nerves wane and wax like the moon
Courage comes and goes as all
Around spin and whirl in space

Eyes glued onto the ground
Unable to rise, until at last
With the effort of lifting the world
Eyes soars to witness the sight

Her body perfect and elegant
Yet so fragile like a statue of glass
Her tender skin glistening in light
That radiates and shines from her

Every movement of her are as
Graceful as those of a dancer
Roses and blossoms fall in grace
As her lovely fragence fills the air

Her eyes, pure as pearls and
Clear as water, sparkle like stars
Rosy lips curl, forming a smile
Of not joy but simple pleasure

The very sight of her beauty
Stirs the coals of amour
That has since laid in my
heart, dormant for years

My heart erupts into an inferno
A burst of fiery passion and love
Sheer bliss rushed through body
Igniting my senses with pleasure

As I steadily approach her
My steps announce my desire
My heart leaps about in joy
Invigorated by the radiating love

Her beauty draws closer
My hunger becomes a surge
Surge of lust overwhelming
Me, drowning out all else

Her body is ever so near
Hearts beating so much faster
Her hot breath fueling my desire
Sending my mind into eternal bliss

First fingers entwin then hands
Her warm flesh exciting my senses
Her crimson lips mingle wtih mine
And together we stood in locked embrace

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PostPosted: July 6th, 2006, 3:41 pm 
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Wow! That one is really good, I got the shivers when I read it!

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PostPosted: July 6th, 2006, 4:05 pm 
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I got shivers as well!! I really like it. :)

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Bravo!

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Wonderful! I don't know what it is, but I think there's a rhythm and a beat to it that is really good. It's kind of mezmerising. lol, I'm weird; I know.

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Its beuatiful Frost. Very deep...I like it.

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Wonderfully done!!!

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That is amazing!

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Very cool! I like the part where you say "Like a statue of glass" you get such a clear picture of what you're describing there.

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