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Post subject: In Love Posted: July 6th, 2006, 10:04 am |
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This is a poem I thought of just overnight. Only looked at it briefly for mistakes so it may not be perfect but here it goes:
In Love
Heart pounding fiercely in chest
Echoing in the far distance
Blood rushing through body
Like a thick red surging current
And as lights flicker on and off
Nerves wane and wax like the moon
Courage comes and goes as all
Around spin and whirl in space
Eyes glued onto the ground
Unable to rise, until at last
With the effort of lifting the world
Eyes soars to witness the sight
Her body perfect and elegant
Yet so fragile like a statue of glass
Her tender skin glistening in light
That radiates and shines from her
Every movement of her are as
Graceful as those of a dancer
Roses and blossoms fall in grace
As her lovely fragence fills the air
Her eyes, pure as pearls and
Clear as water, sparkle like stars
Rosy lips curl, forming a smile
Of not joy but simple pleasure
The very sight of her beauty
Stirs the coals of amour
That has since laid in my
heart, dormant for years
My heart erupts into an inferno
A burst of fiery passion and love
Sheer bliss rushed through body
Igniting my senses with pleasure
As I steadily approach her
My steps announce my desire
My heart leaps about in joy
Invigorated by the radiating love
Her beauty draws closer
My hunger becomes a surge
Surge of lust overwhelming
Me, drowning out all else
Her body is ever so near
Hearts beating so much faster
Her hot breath fueling my desire
Sending my mind into eternal bliss
First fingers entwin then hands
Her warm flesh exciting my senses
Her crimson lips mingle wtih mine
And together we stood in locked embrace
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Post subject: Posted: July 6th, 2006, 3:41 pm |
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Joined: 14 June 2006 Posts: 47 Location: Legends Place
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Wow! That one is really good, I got the shivers when I read it!
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Post subject: Posted: July 6th, 2006, 4:05 pm |
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Joined: 30 December 2005 Posts: 2901
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I got shivers as well!! I really like it. 
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Post subject: Posted: July 13th, 2006, 2:23 pm |
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Joined: 10 June 2005 Posts: 1871 Location: Minas Tirith Country:
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Bravo!
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Post subject: Posted: July 14th, 2006, 12:15 am |
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Joined: 07 June 2006 Posts: 83
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Wonderful! I don't know what it is, but I think there's a rhythm and a beat to it that is really good. It's kind of mezmerising. lol, I'm weird; I know.
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Post subject: Posted: July 14th, 2006, 12:30 pm |
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Joined: 30 October 2005 Posts: 5188 Location: 'Dance like flame cuase theres no gravity, and now I am just a candle trying to stay lit... Country:
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Its beuatiful Frost. Very deep...I like it.
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Post subject: Posted: July 15th, 2006, 4:19 pm |
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Joined: 14 July 2006 Posts: 31
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Wonderfully done!!!
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Post subject: Posted: July 16th, 2006, 5:29 am |
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Joined: 15 March 2006 Posts: 4107 Location: The Square! LOL!
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That is amazing!
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Post subject: Posted: July 16th, 2006, 2:47 pm |
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Joined: 05 July 2006 Posts: 18 Location: The Old Navy of Gondor
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Very cool! I like the part where you say "Like a statue of glass" you get such a clear picture of what you're describing there.
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