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Post subject: "What Love"  Posted: August 29th, 2006, 3:06 pm |
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Joined: 04 November 2005
Posts: 19521
Location: In a pudle on Naboo with dragon kind and ents and Jedi and wolves living in the Last Homely House!
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What love could break the curse,
Laid upon my soul.
Things do change, yet only worse,
I'm part but once was whole.
Inside the sorrows fester still,
To break my heart in four.
But can you break a heart to fill,
That is not there any more?
Silent love, pure love, true, love,
What love could break the curse?
Undying love, divine love, true love,
Will only make it worse.
What love could save my soul,
That's desperate in dispare.
What love could make me whole,
What love could say, "I care"
What love, who's love, and where is this love?
His Love, True Love, He gives this love!
Last edited by Jax Nova on August 30th, 2006, 11:37 am, edited 2 times in total.
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Post subject: Posted: August 29th, 2006, 4:18 pm |
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Joined: 08 January 2006
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Location: The Shire
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OMG, I luv that Jax!!! Ah, I feel like I always say the same thing, but ur stuff's always so good!!!  I love how the end....how u reveal that ur talking about the love of God....It's awesome!! The only problem that I see is....there r a couple mis-spelled words/typos. I'm an English freak, so that's y I noticed this. lol  But other than that, it awesome!! Keep it up!!!  8) _________________ 
"Great art is as irrational as great music. It is mad with its own loveliness."
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Post subject: Posted: August 30th, 2006, 11:37 am |
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Joined: 04 November 2005
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Location: In a pudle on Naboo with dragon kind and ents and Jedi and wolves living in the Last Homely House!
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Thanks.
Yeah, I know my spelling is my worst area I think. I was going to put it through a spell check but I forgot. lol *goes and does that now*
at least I will get some of them out of there. lol
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Post subject: Posted: August 30th, 2006, 4:36 pm |
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Joined: 08 January 2006
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Location: The Shire
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lol. it's fine, it's just a pet peeve. lol idk y *shrugs* *goes back & reads again*still awesome!!! (& no spelling probs!! lol ) i know, i'm a dork, I luv English. lol  Ok well anyway, awesome as usual!! _________________
"Great art is as irrational as great music. It is mad with its own loveliness."
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Post subject: Posted: August 31st, 2006, 8:43 pm |
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Joined: 04 November 2005
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Location: In a pudle on Naboo with dragon kind and ents and Jedi and wolves living in the Last Homely House!
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lol don't feel bad, I think it's a wonderfull thing when people can catch those things and I appreciate you letting me know!
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Post subject: Posted: September 1st, 2006, 4:34 pm |
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Joined: 08 January 2006
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Location: The Shire
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really? b/c sumtimes i tend not 2 tell ppl b/c sum ppl find it annoying.... lol but if u really don't mind, i'll tell u if i find any!! _________________
"Great art is as irrational as great music. It is mad with its own loveliness."
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Post subject: Posted: September 4th, 2006, 11:47 am |
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Joined: 04 November 2005
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Location: In a pudle on Naboo with dragon kind and ents and Jedi and wolves living in the Last Homely House!
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Thanks. I appreciate people poointing out my mistakes, it's one way I can learn and do a better job.
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Post subject: Posted: September 4th, 2006, 12:21 pm |
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Joined: 07 June 2005
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Location: Texas
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Wonderful poem, Jax, as for flaws, if there is any they seem to have been ironed out
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Post subject: Posted: September 4th, 2006, 4:36 pm |
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Joined: 30 December 2005
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Lol, I'm obsessed with that as well, Pip.
The poem is wonderful, Jax!! I love it!! I don't know what else to say, but it's wonderful!!
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Post subject: Posted: September 5th, 2006, 9:11 pm |
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Joined: 08 January 2006
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Location: The Shire
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^Glad 2 know i'm not the only 1 Arwen!! lol _________________
"Great art is as irrational as great music. It is mad with its own loveliness."
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