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Post subject:  Posted: May 5th, 2007, 3:13 pm |
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Here are my votes:
1. Entry Three
2. Entry One
3. Entry Four
4. Entry Two
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Last edited by Turwaithiel Rochben on May 6th, 2007, 6:10 pm, edited 2 times in total.
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Post subject: Posted: May 6th, 2007, 5:53 pm |
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Not to be picky...but lol, how did you vote for Entry 3 twice?
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Post subject: Posted: May 6th, 2007, 6:09 pm |
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oops!!! Let me edit that....  _________________
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Post subject: Posted: May 6th, 2007, 8:05 pm |
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Great entries! I liked reading all of them!
1. Entry four
2. Entry two
3. Entry three
4. Entry one
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Post subject: Posted: May 7th, 2007, 8:05 pm |
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Comments:
Entry One - good concept. (I'm going to do some criticism now, please don't feel bad) The actual execution needs to be rethought, though. It makes for an almost monotonous read - mix up the sentence structure from noun-verb, noun-verb. Good detailing, though.
Entry Two - again, good concept, but having a monologue as the body makes the piece seem like a contrived frame for a patriotic essay.
Entry Three - mmm, nice. It doesn't 'feel' canonically consistent, but a nice way of working the description.
Entry Four - effective, good job!
my vote:
1. Entry Four
2. Entry Three
3. Entry Two
4. Entry One
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Post subject: Posted: May 7th, 2007, 8:06 pm |
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^ BLASTOFF!!! lol
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Post subject: Posted: May 8th, 2007, 12:30 pm |
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lol Turwaithiel 
Eee thanks for the votes everyone - and for the comments Valera  Obviously you don't know which one I wrote and I can't say which either lol but thanks anyway
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Post subject: Posted: May 11th, 2007, 6:04 pm |
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Another round! *squee!!!*
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Post subject: Posted: May 11th, 2007, 6:55 pm |
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Joined: 24 August 2005
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1. Entry 4--Very nice job! Believable and touching.
2. Entry 3--Good job as well. I liked your description a lot. It was very vivid. A few technical details bumped you down to second, but you did very well.
3. Entry 1--I liked your idea a lot. The thoughts of the man seemed realistic and it was very memorable. As Valera said, your sentence structure could be more varied, but good job all the same.
4. Entry 2--I liked your description of Osigiliath. For whatever reason, using Faramir and Pippin as your characters didn't work for me. Your Faramir has a strong voice, which is a good thing, but it is naturally a different voice than Tolkien's. I think it would have been better if you had created your own characters.
Good job everyone, I enjoyed reading your entries.
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