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Post subject: Lay Down To Die Posted: October 28th, 2007, 1:28 pm |
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Lay down to die,
Lay down to never awake.
Want to fall into
An endless sleep,
Dreaming everlasting,
Dreaming endlessly.
Don't want to bother
Waking up,
Life's too hard to live on,
Want to lie down
Forever more,
Don't need to live further.
Felt so worthless,
Felt so useless,
Every accomplishment
Turned into a mistake.
Don't need to be
Needed anymore.
Just need to step
Out of this world.
Vanishing, never returning,
Never waking.
Could never see,
Life's true meaning.
Too hard to go
Searching for.
Wasting precious time.
What it was worth,
Could never tell.
How to smile,
How to love,
Without going through hell.
Lay,
Lay down to die.
Lay down to never awake.
It's already over,
It's already happened.
There's no reason
To continue living.
Hands are stained with blood,
Didn't want this to ever come.
Just lay down to die.
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Post subject: Posted: October 29th, 2007, 10:42 pm |
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Joined: 03 June 2005 Posts: 13144 Location: Heaven: Rockin' with Severus Snape Country:
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You've no idea how much your poem just made me cry. After having someone very close to me just take their life I can not help being reminded of what may have been going through his head at the time.
In technical terms, it's a very good poem. Despite the painful memories it gives me I like it a lot. But really, isn't that what poetry should do, evoke some kind of emotion?
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Post subject: Posted: October 31st, 2007, 4:48 pm |
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^Yes, I think thats what poetry should do.
Heehee..^^ thanks for reading. =]
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Post subject: Posted: October 31st, 2007, 10:25 pm |
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Joined: 03 June 2005 Posts: 13144 Location: Heaven: Rockin' with Severus Snape Country:
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No problem. You've captured the perfect amount of emotion. Wonderful job. 
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Post subject: Words to jarr me... Posted: November 14th, 2007, 2:00 am |
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Joined: 03 June 2006 Posts: 302 Location: Portland, Oregon USA Country:
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Those thoughts are foreign to me. I can't immagine thinking them for real. That is why you wrote them and I read them. I have friends that have gone through horrible depression and they really can't express it to me. But I think you did a pretty good job of it!
Words to jarr me into the reality all around me that I have never felt.
_________________ "If you do not find a way, no one will."
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