I've now read the whole thing. Really good! You know the characters very well, and all the details add up to make it sound exactly like a small-town. You used good diction and it was a really enjoyable read! Good work!

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I read the whole thing. It's really good! Good use of similies, metaphors, good diction, you knew the characters well and it was exactly how you would imagine a small town.

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I read the whole thing. It's really good! Good use of similies, metaphors, good diction, you knew the characters well and it was exactly how you would imagine a small town.

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Thanks, Miluiel! I've grown up in a small town, so I guess I can write one pretty well, eh? But if you don't mind my asking, what small details? I'm so used to everything because I live in a small town, so I have no idea what you're talking about. =]

I'm starting to get really attatched to my characters. Particularly one who hasn't yet made his appearance. =]

Btw, Miluiel, do you have a nickname? Raina gave me another the other day, you know... She calls me Marcy now, lol!

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at one point, I was alejandrah.

Such as everyone knowing everything about everyone else, being hired by association, things like that.

I go by Mil, Milly, whatever you like XD. I'm not particular. A lot of people have problems spelling Miluiel, so they just use Mil or Milly

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Oh. I never thought about it like that. xD I guess that's what I get for living in it, hm?

And believe me. EVERYONE knows EVERYTHING. These things happen when your great grand parents were in preschool together. O.O

A hard time spelling Miluiel? No! Of couse, my spelling method is to stare at it until I memorize it, so I guess I don't get an opinion. Milly will do nicely, though. =]

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<center>“Envy consists in seeing things never in themselves, but only in their relations. If you desire glory, you may envy Napoleon, but Napoleon envied Caesar, Caesar envied Alexander, and Alexander, I daresay, envied Hercules, who never existed.”
at one point, I was alejandrah.

Yes, Eyalan in particular had trouble spelling it. XD

Your grandparents? Wow. I'm only a second-generation Canadian, so my great grandparents were most deffinitely not schooled together, XD.

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No, Milly, I mean my great grand parents and almost all my classmate's great grand parents were in school together. It goes WAY back. =]

My family's been in this general area of my state since before it entered the union. You know, back when it was a territory and full of Indians, who're also my relatives. There's a few... colorful... stories about my relatives I'd be happy to share with you via PM simply because they're entertaining, but I can't necessarily repeat here. =]

*looks arounds* I'm being good, Modsies dearests, I swear!

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<center>“Envy consists in seeing things never in themselves, but only in their relations. If you desire glory, you may envy Napoleon, but Napoleon envied Caesar, Caesar envied Alexander, and Alexander, I daresay, envied Hercules, who never existed.”
at one point, I was alejandrah.

Yes, I know. My great grandparents are from all over XD. And sure, you can PM me any time. That would be a better place to talk about this sort of thing. I'll also give you a bit of my story to look over. I don't feel comfortable posting it. I've been working on it for so long that it's like a kid that I am very overprotective with XD.

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Click the owrd Elementals! lol!

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Married Cloud Strife 9/17/08

Oh . Mil has had another long day, you'll have to forgive me. I'll have a look straight away!

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It's okay, Milu! *gives chocolate fudge brownie* I know what you mean! I've had plenty of tough days in my short life!

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Married Cloud Strife 9/17/08

*Squeals* I've read it and commented. It's very good! Might there be another brownie hanging around, perhaps?

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Thanks! *hands Milu another chocolate fudge brownie*

I'll get part two up in a minute... but it's not as good as part 1, I think... though, I think part 1 is the best one... lol!

I was going to say something else... but I forgot what it was... lol!

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Married Cloud Strife 9/17/08

Ok, I've been working on my story. Same story I've been working on for months. And believe it or not, I need a setting. I'm debating between an alternate universe with steampunk like technology and modern world city. Any suggestions?

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I was cured all right.

^Both of those settings sound pretty dang cool! I'd probably say steampunk... I'm not sure why. lol What's the story about, if you don't mind me asking?