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 Post subject: Lay Down To Die
PostPosted: October 28th, 2007, 1:28 pm 


Lay down to die,
Lay down to never awake.
Want to fall into
An endless sleep,
Dreaming everlasting,
Dreaming endlessly.
Don't want to bother
Waking up,
Life's too hard to live on,
Want to lie down
Forever more,
Don't need to live further.

Felt so worthless,
Felt so useless,
Every accomplishment
Turned into a mistake.
Don't need to be
Needed anymore.
Just need to step
Out of this world.
Vanishing, never returning,
Never waking.

Could never see,
Life's true meaning.
Too hard to go
Searching for.
Wasting precious time.
What it was worth,
Could never tell.
How to smile,
How to love,
Without going through hell.

Lay,
Lay down to die.
Lay down to never awake.
It's already over,
It's already happened.
There's no reason
To continue living.
Hands are stained with blood,
Didn't want this to ever come.

Just lay down to die.


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PostPosted: October 29th, 2007, 10:42 pm 
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You've no idea how much your poem just made me cry. After having someone very close to me just take their life I can not help being reminded of what may have been going through his head at the time.

In technical terms, it's a very good poem. Despite the painful memories it gives me I like it a lot. But really, isn't that what poetry should do, evoke some kind of emotion?


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PostPosted: October 31st, 2007, 4:48 pm 


^Yes, I think thats what poetry should do.

Heehee..^^ thanks for reading. =]


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PostPosted: October 31st, 2007, 10:25 pm 
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No problem. You've captured the perfect amount of emotion. Wonderful job. :)


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 Post subject: Words to jarr me...
PostPosted: November 14th, 2007, 2:00 am 
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Those thoughts are foreign to me. I can't immagine thinking them for real. That is why you wrote them and I read them. I have friends that have gone through horrible depression and they really can't express it to me. But I think you did a pretty good job of it!

Words to jarr me into the reality all around me that I have never felt.

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