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Post subject: Don't...  Posted: December 24th, 2007, 11:24 am |
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Location: In a pudle on Naboo with dragon kind and ents and Jedi and wolves living in the Last Homely House!
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Rip my heart, break my bone,
Stop my start, block light once shone.
Crush my lungs, dull my mind,
Block tongue, hide peace to find.
Shoot me in the back, stab me with a knife.
Strangle me to death, take away my life.
Burn me in the flame, devide my life once whole,
Curse my very name, Just don't betray and crush my soul.
Last edited by Jax Nova on January 1st, 2008, 12:58 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Post subject: Posted: December 26th, 2007, 12:30 pm |
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Nice very effective outcome, quite dramatic. I love it 
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Post subject: Posted: January 1st, 2008, 12:44 pm |
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Location: In a pudle on Naboo with dragon kind and ents and Jedi and wolves living in the Last Homely House!
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Thanks, for the comment appreciate it.  and glad you liked it.
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Post subject: Posted: January 4th, 2008, 7:28 pm |
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Very nice, Jax. I also like the dramatic effect. Good word choice.
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Post subject: Posted: January 14th, 2008, 12:29 pm |
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Location: In a pudle on Naboo with dragon kind and ents and Jedi and wolves living in the Last Homely House!
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Thanks for commenting and glad youliked it. (lol I feel like I say the same thing everytime someone posts.. maybe I should think of something else to say... 8shrugs*)
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Post subject: Posted: January 14th, 2008, 5:29 pm |
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Wow! Very heart wrenching!
I've got a question that will help you think of something else to say besides thanks.
What was the insperation for this one?
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Post subject: Posted: February 1st, 2008, 11:36 am |
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Location: In a pudle on Naboo with dragon kind and ents and Jedi and wolves living in the Last Homely House!
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Well... (I always find answering this question dificult)
Most of my poetry doesn't have a specific event or anything that inspires it but it is usually a direct outcome of my current emotional state.
This one was brought on by some trouble in my family that didn't so much hurt me but made me realize something about myself.
I don't trust people ever... because I always feel that they are going to betray me for some reason.
I guess I'm paranoid. *shrugs* But that's the basic turn of events that lead to this poem.
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