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PostPosted: March 5th, 2006, 2:44 pm 
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Ok, this is my first time writing poetry, and I did this hastily during math class a couple days ago... I'd appriciate any advice you guys have!! You'll all probably notice the lines from LotR that snuck in there inevitablely, lol.

I'm so lost
I'm so, so alone
Ane hopelessness fills me
right down to the bone
No one to listen
no one to confide
I'm on a Lonely Isle
with a surrounding high tide
The sea will soon sweep me away
to lands unknown
To lands far away
where the sun has not shone
The Shadow is upon me
the end has come
Tears flood my eyes
my heart is numb
I walk a lonely road
I'm so far from home

But look! A star shines
in the evening sky
A small beam of hope
that cannot die
There is beauty up there
that no shadow can touch
It will go on
though it's not much
A hope to us all
when darkness covers day
If we believe
we will find our way

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PostPosted: March 6th, 2006, 7:16 pm 
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Very nice! :) Gave good imagery and rymed nicely.

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PostPosted: March 6th, 2006, 8:10 pm 
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Thanks!! :)

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PostPosted: March 7th, 2006, 2:50 pm 
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:) will you be posting more?

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PostPosted: March 7th, 2006, 8:04 pm 
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Well... we'll see. I'm not sure. :blush: Maybe though.

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ok. Will be watching. Just PM me if I don't reply I might miss it. lol. But if you like writing I say keep it up! You got talent and if you injoy it... well why not do it.

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PostPosted: March 7th, 2006, 9:30 pm 
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Thank you- and I'll let you know. :)

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PostPosted: March 8th, 2006, 2:46 pm 
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ok. :)

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*agrees w/ everything jax said* :-D
*is jealous* lol :)

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lol. You should post some of yours if you have any. Maybe somone out there can give you some advice to help you. I honestly would know nothing to say to you besides try to rym and keep the sylables constant to a degree... but I really don't know much about the technical stuff.. (and let it flow) :)


By the way Arwenevenstar, I like the way you portray hope in the end of the poem. :)

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PostPosted: March 9th, 2006, 6:51 pm 
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no, but thanks anyway. :-D

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PostPosted: March 9th, 2006, 6:58 pm 
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oh alright....

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lol. trust me, not my thing.

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PostPosted: March 9th, 2006, 7:18 pm 
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Ok. I guess we all have things like that.

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PostPosted: March 12th, 2006, 2:50 pm 
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Thanks, both of you!! :) I might post some more up in awhile... but I've been sooooooo busy lately with all of my school stuff- we had end of the trimester finals this week. I'll try to write more when I have time. Thanks again!! :)

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Ok! :) will wait. Although If I miss it feel free to PM me about it I tend to be unobservant at times.

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